E P Collier

Primary School and Nursery

Nurture. Discover. Achieve.


I've put two videos together for you to have a look at. 


The first one wouldn't upload to the webpage, so I've given you a YouTube link instead. This is of me talking through the purpose and audience for a re-tell, and the devices we need to use to make our final writing as powerful and exciting for our reader as we can.


I then give you two ideas to work on today to make sure you use the devices we've talked about: 

  1. using adjectives in expanded noun phrases
  2. using fronted adverbials
  3. using varied conjunctions


The second video shows the final version of my first two sentences, and how I changed them from very simple sentences into something effective for the reader. 

Building descriptive sentences.mp4

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