I've put two videos together for you to have a look at.
The first one wouldn't upload to the webpage, so I've given you a YouTube link instead. This is of me talking through the purpose and audience for a re-tell, and the devices we need to use to make our final writing as powerful and exciting for our reader as we can.
I then give you two ideas to work on today to make sure you use the devices we've talked about:
The second video shows the final version of my first two sentences, and how I changed them from very simple sentences into something effective for the reader.